Writing That Cracks, Sizzles, and Pops!

We love to describe things as the holiday season approaches, but too often we're stuck with the same bunch of adjectives that don't really make us feel anything. 

For example, you may love Grandma's apple pie, but how do you describe it? “Yummy!” 

How about those fancy lights outside? “Beautiful!” 

Dad's turkey? “Delicious!” 

See what I mean? All those words SOUND like they mean something, but we don't truly see or taste what you do. 

Let's think of some ways to really capture a moment, food, sound, or image. Our goal when describing something is to make the other person know EXACTLY what you mean, even though he wasn't there.

What's a great way to do this? By using our five senses! If you rely on these, your reader will never wonder about what you really mean.

Here are some examples where we turn drab to fab. Notice how the drab doesn't describe, while the fab gives examples on how to make the details pop.

 DRAB                                                                            FAB

yummy -- creamy, spicy, greasy, bits of apple dancing in my mouth

delicious -- oozing chocolate, melted caramel, cinnamon topping crumbling on my lips

beautiful -- sparkling, multi-colored, glowing red and blue, reflecting in the snow, twinkling glass

loud -- crackling fire, cackling children, ear-splitting violin playing, leaves crunching under feet

You try some now. What word(s) do you use a lot? Amazing? Cool? Awesome?
Try to rewrite some sentences to give us an idea of what things look, taste, smell, sound, and feel like.

HAPPY THANKSGIVING!

- Margie

Gobble, Gobble, PLOT!

We'll talk turkey in just a minute! First, an announcement:

The winner of Ellen Jensen Abbott's WATERSMEET novel is Sarah. Sarah, your comment was posted on November 19th: Would love to win it. It has been on my to read list far too long already. Please email Nancy: info(at sign)nancyviau(dot)com and give your full name and address. WATERSMEET will arrive at your doorstep soon.

Let's move on with a turkey-inspired tip. Take it away, Alison!

Thanksgiving is right around the corner and we all look forward to a great meal that day. When you hear about a new book from a friend or librarian, you look forward to reading it, too. Everyone loves reading about interesting characters, but the actions or "plot" characters experience is also important to create great stories. Actions (big and small) drive the plot in a story forward and keeps readers reading. Character actions might be huge, like facing an evil wizard, but other actions might be something small, but equally important to a story, like earning a special badge in Cub Scouts.

Let's gobble, gobble this fun way to help PLOT a story:

Imagine a character you are writing about or choose one of your favorite book or movie characters. Dorothy in the Wizard of Oz is the example used below for this exercise.

1. Use crayons or paint to make a turkey handprint on a blank sheet of paper. Let paint dry.

2. Write the character's name and what they want in the center of the palm of your handprint.

Dorothy wants to go home to Kansas.

3. On the thumb and each finger, write an action for your character which will help create an exciting and interesting story plot.

You can draw more feathers on your turkey to add as many actions as you can imagine

Five actions for Dororthy in Wizard of Oz

Runs away from home and tornado

Lands in Oz

Meets a good witch, a scarecrow, tin man, and lion

Arrives at the Emerald City

Defeats the Wicked Witch

4. Keep in mind what your character wants. (Example: Dorothy wants to go home to Kansas)

Now, write a story using the plotting actions you've imagined for your own character or write new story for a favorite character from books or movies.

Gobble, gobble! Happy Thanksgiving!

-Alison

Not Sure How to Create a Fantasy World? Build It!

Drum roll, please .... Ellen Jensen Abbott is here! Ellen is celebrating the release of THE KEEPER, the last book in her trilogy. Fans of the first two, WATERSMEET and THE CENTAUR'S DAUGHTER, are itching to get their hands on THE KEEPER. Hurry up and get your copy, readers!! This one will sell out fast.

Ellen is an expert at world building, so I thought it might be interesting to hear some tips from her on how to build a fantasy world from scratch. Take it away, Ellen!

One of my favorite words is “verisimilitude.” It’s a long word and seems like it would be hard to remember but it simply describes something that seems true. Verisimilitude is always my goal when writing a story. Even if I’m writing a story about a centaur—a mythological creature who is half man, half horse—I want that centaur to seem real.

In fantasy, the challenge of making a story seem real is particularly hard. Not only do writers often have characters like centaurs, they have totally made-up worlds! Those worlds are fun to write about, but to make them seem real, to give them verisimilitude, you have to do some extra work. Below are some of my favorite tips for creating verisimilitude in your story—whether it’s set in this world or another. 

Tip 1: Draw it! It helps to have a clear image of a place or a character in your story. I often get out my crayons or colored pencils to draw a picture of some part of my story. Sometimes I cut out pictures from the newspaper or print pictures from the internet if they help me see a place or a person better. I hang my drawings and clippings on my bulletin board in my office so I can see them when I write.
Tip 2: Map it! Like drawing a character or a place, I find it very helpful to draw a map of where my characters live. In my fantasy trilogy, The Watersmeet Trilogy, I mapped out the entire land, complete with mountain ranges, rivers and villages. But I’ve also mapped out the apartment where a character lives or the street she lives on. These maps help me make sure my characters are headed in the right direction whenever they leave one room and go to another! (Note from Nancy: I couldn't upload Ellen's maps. If you ever get the chance to hear her speak, she'll show you these, and believe me, you will be amazed.)
Tip 3: Look it up!  There are all kinds of cool books out there that can help you build real worlds for your characters to live in. If you’ve never been to Arizona but your character takes a trip there, you can find guide books to Arizona in your library and on line. The books will tell you what kind of animals your character might see, what kind of plants grow in the desert, and what the weather might be like. If you’re going to the desert, you want your character to remember his water bottle! 
Tip 4: Schedule it! I am writing a story right now about a girl who is in ninth grade. Every day she goes to school and follows a schedule. If I change the schedule every day or if she goes to no class but math, my readers are going to think my story is not very realistic, so I have to draw up a set schedule for her. Similarly, in Watersmeet, The Centaur’s Daughter, and The Keeper, I kept a calendar of my character’s adventure. I needed to know how long it took her to travel between the Obrun Mountains and Giant’s Cairn so that the next time she made the journey I could have it take the same amount of time. If it took too little time, I would hurt my verisimilitude. 
Tip 5: Name it! For any writer, a good baby-naming book is critical! All of your characters have to have names and believe it or not, you can run out of them. I keep two baby naming books on my desk at all times. When I’m writing fantasy, I can’t use familiar names. (Who ever heard of a centaur named Bob?) But I use pieces of names and connect them to come up with new names that still sound like they could be real. 
Tip #6: Write it! Sometimes you just have to write out a scene to discover what you want/need to know about it. When I’m writing, I let myself make lots of mistakes and try out different plot lines or characters or places until I find the one I’m happy with it. This means I throw out a lot of pages, but I’m learning the whole time I’m writing. And I can always go back and fix up the mistakes later.

Thank you, Ellen. Those are wonderful tips!

WITty kids and writers everywhere, are you ready to build a world by building verisimilitude? Get out your pencils and draw one of your characters or sketch a map of where that character lives. You may discover a whole new part of your story. 

And guess what?

Ellen is giving away a copy of WATERSMEET

so you have the chance to get started on this great trilogy!

Just comment below OR email me: 

info(at sign)nancyviau(dot)com.

We will pick a random winner next Thursday, November 21.

 

About WATERSMEET: (Perfect for 5th grade and up) From her birth, Abisina has been outcast—for the color of her eyes and skin, and for her lack of a father. Only her mother’s status as the village healer has kept her safe. But when a mythic leader arrives, Abisina’s life is ripped apart. She escapes alone to try to find the father and the home she has never known. In a world of extremes, from the deepest prejudice to the greatest bonds of duty and loyalty, Abisina must find her own way and decide where her true hope lies.

About the trilogy: Readers follow Abisina as she leaves her village to search for her father and for acceptance. On her journey, she discovers the whole land of Seldara: the dwarves of the Obrun Mountains; the fauns of the western forests; the centaurs of Giant’s Cairn—some friends, some foes. When she reaches Watersmeet, she thinks she’s found the home of her dreams where all of Seldara’s folk are welcome, but soon Watersmeet’s existence is at risk and Abisina finds herself outcast again. Can she save the home she loves? Can she unite the land against a gathering evil? Can she embrace her destiny and become the Keeper of Watersmeet? 

Looking for more? Go over to Ellen's website: http://ellenjensenabbott.wordpress.com/.

Have a fantasy-filled, fantastic week!
: )
Nancy

 

Are You Stuck?

What to write . . . what to write . . . what to write . . . what to write . . . what to write . . .

If you’re having trouble coming up with ideas to write about, check out these websites - I’m sure you’ll find something that sparks your imagination!!

http://www.scholastic.com/teachers/story-starters/

http://www.superteacherworksheets.com/journal-prompts.html

http://www.enchantedlearning.com/essay/

http://www.alextoys.com/get-kids-writing-20-writing-prompts-for-kids/#.UnG5s5RDpbM

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/news/twenty-fun-writing-prompts-for-children/

http://abington.patch.com/groups/yolanda-fontanezcolemans-blog/p/bp--10-creative-writing-prompts-for-kids

http://journalbuddies.com/journal_prompts__journal_topics/writing-prompts-for-kids/

Gobble Up a Quote Sandwich!

Hey all!  

Today we're going to talk about sandwiches! Cheese, turkey, pizza burgers. Yum! Oops. That was my stomach talking. Today's blog is about QUOTE sandwiches. I know, I know. They're not delicious at all, but they will totally help you ace those pesky standardized state tests.  

Quote sandwiches are used in Open-Ended Questions (aka OEQs). Those questions can be found after a reading passage. In the questions, you're asked to go back to the passage to support your answer. Still with me? Check out these paragraphs  below about Welsh corgis (taken from http://www.thewritesource.com/studentmodels/we-corgi.htm).  

Since Welsh corgis are so intelligent, they are easy to train. One of the jobs they are good at is herding sheep and cattle. Welsh corgis are also very loyal companions for people of all ages.

The Welsh corgi’s small size means it doesn’t take up much room as a pet. Its average height is 10-12 inches, and an adult dog weighs approximately 25-30 pounds.

Welsh corgis are also known for being bold but kind, friendly, and alert. They are friendly to all, good with children, and rarely aggressive. 

Let's look a this sample OEQ about the passage. 

Why would Welsh corgis make great pets? Use evidence from the passage to support your answer. 

The “evidence” is the quote, and now we get to the good part. How to make it into a nutritious word sandwich! Think of a real sandwich. There's a top piece of bread, a bottom, and then the yummy goodness in the middle. That's how we have to think of our quote too. The top part will introduce the quote, the middle will be the quote, and the end will sum up what the quote means (or why it's good). 

Check it out as I answer the OEQ from above. 

            Welsh corgis would make great pets for many reasons. As the passage states, “The Welsh corgi's small size means it doesn't take up much room as a pet....Welsh corgis are also known for being bold but kind, friendly, and alert. They are friendly to all, good with children, and rarely aggressive.” As you can see, a Welsh corgi would not need much space in the house. Also, since they are good with children and kind, they would be ideal in any family. 

See what we just did? We introduced our evidence (the quote in blue). Then, we stated our quote from the passage (in red). Finally, we explained the quote (in green). 

There you have it, the three layers of the quote sandwich. Now, I'm off to get some real turkey to munch on!

 

~ Margie

 

 

Is This a Happy Blog? A Hoppy Blog? A Blog Hop?

It’s a Blog Hop!

What’s a Blog Hop? It's where children's book authors answer identical questions and then invite a few more authors to join in. (We're supposed to ask three. I asked two. I hope the Blog Police don't come after me. *looks around nervously*)


Jody Jensen Shaffer tagged me, and I will answer the questions in a second. First, it's my pleasure to introduce Jody. Please read her bio below, and then go to her website to find out more. Next, RUN to the bookstore to buy her wonderful books.

Jody is the author of 14 published and forthcoming books for children and numerous poems and magazine stories. She has written celebrity biographies and books about animals, science, and social studies. Her work has been published in Highlights High Five, Highlights Hello, Babybug, Humpty Dumpty, Turtle, Pack-o-Fun, Clubhouse Jr, COLUMBIAKids, and coming soon in Highlights. She is represented by Kathleen Rushall of Marsal Lyon Literary. You can visit Jody at http://jodyjensenshaffer.blogspot.com.

Here are my answers to the Blog Hop questions:

What are you working on now?

Right now, I’m deep into rhyme and going cross-eyed over perfect meter and stanza length. Why? I’m working on the edits for my next picture book, City Street Beat, and my editor wants these edits done by the end of next week. The other books I have in my muddled, rhyming brain must be put on hold for a bit, but I can't wait to get back to them. There's one with an interactive component that's keeping me up at night.

How does it differ from other works in the genre?

Mine differs from other rhyming picture books in that it has an unusual rhyme scheme and an abundance of onomatopoeia (sound words).  

Why do you do what you do?
I stink at Math.

What is the hardest part about writing?

The hardest part is having a terrific idea but not being sure about the best way to get it down on paper. I want to love it! I want my agent to love it! And I want it to sell, so children have the opportunity to love it! That’s not asking too much, is it? * sigh *

Now, I get to tag a few more authors. Please read their bios below and take a minute to HOP over to their blog posts!

Michelle Houts lives and plays on a family farm in Ohio. She shares her days with three children, the farmer of her dreams, cattle, hogs, a whole lot of barn cats, and a dog the size of a small horse. She enjoys reading, cooking and hiking any place that has hills because where she lives it is very flat. Michelle recently acquired a one-room schoolhouse built in 1894. With restoration underway, she dreams of turning it into her writing space. Michelle’s debut middle grade novel The Beef Princess of Practical County (Random House) received the 2010 International Reading Association Children’s Book Award for intermediate fiction and the 2011 Nebraska Agricultural Children’s Book of the Year. Michelle’s next two middle grade novels The Practical County Drama Queen (MuseItUp) and Winterfrost (Candlewick Press) will be released in 2014. Visit her blog: www.michellehouts.com/wordpress!

Linda Bozzo is the author of over 50 nonfiction books for the school and library market. She enjoys writing fiction as well as nonfiction for children. Many of her fiction stories are inspired by her love of dance. Linda is a member of the Society for Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators. She enjoys presenting her writing journey to both children and adults. Linda lives in New Jersey with her family where she can visit the Jersey shore and enjoy the culture of New York City. You can find Linda online at http://www.lindabozzo.com. Blog: Writerlinda.blogspot.com

Let's Dress Up Words!

Hi there, WIT followers. 
It's Alison Formento. I'm happy to meet you!

Halloween is coming soon and we’re busy getting our costumes ready for the big day. Do you have a costume parade in your town or at your school? Wigs, hats, special clothing, masks, make-up and more are used for dress up October 31st. 

Words can be dressed up, too. 

Look at this photo:

Here’s one way to describe it:

A devil walked by. She was followed by a musician with a violin. 

Let’s dress up those same words in a new description of the scene.

A short, red devil had an evil smile on her face.

The nervous classical musician followed close and held tight to his prized violin.

Now, write down what you’re going to be for Halloween and what you plan to wear for your costume. 

Example: Clown with wig and bow tie. 

Dress up your costume with more description this time: 

I plan to be a clown. I’ll wear a crazy rainbow wig, a floppy polka dot bow tie, and giant shoes as long as my arm.

Find out what your friends and classmates are wearing and write out a description of their costumes, too. Use these costume descriptions to create your own fun and spooky Halloween story.

Trick-or-treat!

~ Alison